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WRITING: Poetry: Dear Kupika Girl


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11 March 2009, 08:22 PM   #1
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Dear Kupika Girl,
Out there in the world
A few simple words
Here from
Me
Your kindness erases
Those lingering traces
Dark corridors of faces
Once like a cancerous
Memory

Dear Kupika Girl,
Is this what you wanted
To leave me so haunted
By your phantom who
Whispers delights
So that when the wind blows
And I’m broken and cold
I’ll recall your sweet voice
In the night

Dear Kupika Girl,
Maybe you wait for Jesus
Maybe you wait for
Cain
If I could take
Your burdens upon me
I’d gladly be broken
Again

Dear Kupika Girl,
You hear the hunger
In the stillness of
My plaintive voice
And yet you laugh
Coolly reminding me
True love’s rarely
	If ever,
Within our choice

Oh! Kupika Girl,
Sometimes I think of you
Softly swaying
Undressing there
That way you do for me
I close my eyes
And turn my head
Feeling you so free

Dear Kupika Girl,
If I am fire
You must be fuel
And if God’s not a liar
He’s painfully cruel
Separating our two hearts
In time and distance

Sweet Kupika Girl,
I am the sundial
In need of your Shade
You are the
Velvet sheath
And I the carbon Blade

Dearest Kupika Girl,
If your lover leaves you
Dropping those laurels from
Atop his head
I’ll pick them up
From the floor for you
And we’ll leave
What is left
Unsaid

But Kupika Girl,
There is one thing
That remains quite
A Mystery
How can you be
So insecure
And so unsure
So unaware
Of your Beauty

My Dear Sweet Kupika Girl,
I know there have been times
And scandalous crimes
You’ve been saddened
And torn
And mistreated
Just so you know
I’ll make my deeds show
That I will Never
Hurt you the way
He did.

- Promise.

I love you, Eduardo

11 March 2009, 08:35 PM   #2
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I love the third verse the most

11 March 2009, 08:45 PM   #3
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hah thanks! that verse was inspired by a verse out of one of Leonard Cohen's poems/songs
which is similar in the first two lines of that verse.....who by the way I'm going to see
next month in concert!!!! im so stoked about it.

11 March 2009, 08:47 PM   #4
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Lolz, you silly I wonder who they wait for

11 March 2009, 08:57 PM   #5
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well frankly i think the ideal man for most girls combines a little of both qualities of
a Jesus or Cain figure..

don't all women want a guy that is sensible, caring, loving, peaceful, wise, who will care
and tender to them and at the same time who has some bit of unpredictablity, wildness,
passion, "bad-boy" to them?

i think that is so.....

or maybe some women do want to be saved from their current circumstances and others want
to surrender to their inner desires

in my verse I offer to be both figures to my love, as both Jesus and Cain were "broken" in
a way, Jesus by way of sacrifice and Cain by way of being marked and outcast.  For someone
that I love, i would give my life for her (or him) or save her from humilation by taking
it upon myself if that were possible.

11 March 2009, 09:01 PM   #6
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Hmm, interesting Cain already came into my life, but then he left I'm just waiting for Him to come back and apologize

12 March 2009, 10:17 AM   #7
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Dear Kupika Girl,
If I am fire
You must be fuel
And if God’s not a liar
He’s painfully cruel
Separating our two hearts
In time and distance
My favourite part ;]

Gosh Eddie, that's really deep!
I love your poetry, this poem's my favourite so far =]

12 March 2009, 04:24 PM   #8
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Last edited by Oroborus21, 12 March 2009
that verse was inspired by Kelly, the Aussie I was hot for at the time, but it like the
entire poem could reflect my feelings about a lot of the girls i like and who are my
friends that live far away from me :-(

and thanks hon

22 March 2009, 06:20 PM   #9
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Your rhythm is very good. I could read your poems hours on end. And I think your reference to Cain and Jesus is wonderful
x Each night I wish upon a star I'll run and run , oh so far . To get away from this normal place To hide the pain of your taken face . x </3

23 March 2009, 12:59 AM    #10
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Posts: 28
Like mextreehugger said, I love how you reference in Jesus and Cain. 
Maybe you wait for Jesus
Maybe you wait for
Cain
If I could take
Your burdens upon me
I’d gladly be broken
Again

I love that.
Po-e-try makes me happyyyy.


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