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WRITING: Poetry:I Know Him


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10 May 2009, 10:38 PM   #1
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Last edited by Oroborus21, 12 May 2009
I know him like no other
Its like he is my brother
But I love him more than that
It seems like I have to be picked out of a hat
But I want him to pick me out of that hat
A deep,deep black hole
Way on the bottom
Oh will he reach that low
To reach me at the bottom

12 May 2009, 09:56 PM   #2
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Last edited by mextreehugger, 12 May 2009
Title should be;


haha it seems like you're going for a deep meaning here... but the whole "that- hat" rhyme is very Dr. Seuss... unless you were aiming for that .
x Each night I wish upon a star I'll run and run , oh so far . To get away from this normal place To hide the pain of your taken face . x </3

12 May 2009, 10:38 PM   #3
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yeah fair comment manduh, but she is a young poet so im sure she will grow in her
sophistication, thanks for the title thing, i didnt think about it and we do wnat to stay
consistent to make it easy to sort out posts

14 May 2009, 01:26 AM    #4
Joined: 21 Mar 2009
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Sorry to critique like a bitch ... D:
x Each night I wish upon a star I'll run and run , oh so far . To get away from this normal place To hide the pain of your taken face . x </3



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