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WRITING: Poetry: A Once Beautiful Heart


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22 March 2009, 07:30 PM   #1
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Last edited by Manderlinaa, 28 June 2009
Amanda Stone Sometimes life hands you things That you really don’t want to hold But they say you must go on, strive forth, Go into the world and be bold. What do you do, though, when you can’t keep a smile? To where do you go when nothing’s worthwhile? As you lie on the bed, staring at the ceiling Wishing at least, to have some type of feeling Other than this, anything but the black hole Hiding inside you, slicing through soul. Warm tears don’t even come To ease the heavy pain They say you’ve used much too much They are never coming again. Laying there on the sheets with an empty expression Avoiding all thoughts of the suicidal depression Legs curled into your chest so tight Maybe, go away, the pain just might Let it melt and wither apart Just like what happened To your once beautiful heart.
22 03 2009
x Each night I wish upon a star I'll run and run , oh so far . To get away from this normal place To hide the pain of your taken face . x </3

11 April 2009, 07:51 AM   #2
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Joined: 11 Mar 2009
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its a touching poem i think many can identify with, nice rhythm and rhyme.

(got a slight typo, missing preposition "at" in 8th line i think)

good job

28 June 2009, 05:01 PM   #3
Joined: 22 Jun 2009
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Sorry , I never saw your comment . Thanks , I fixed it & I'm glad you relate (:
oh so insane . ♥

29 June 2009, 09:33 PM    #4
Joined: 29 Jun 2009
Posts: 28
Nice poems. It's really beautiful.
I need a hope
I need a light
Something to look to
In the arctic night
Where beauty abounds
In everything
There, my friends, is what I need



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