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21 August 2009, 08:57 PM   #1
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Last edited by Oroborus21, 21 August 2009
Ok ladies and gentlemen,

lets practice making traditional Haikus

Traditional Haiku form:

Haiku in Japanese has three lines written one right after another, with 17 syllables --
the first line contains five syllables, the second has seven, and the last has five. 

line one 5 syllables
line two 7 syllables
line three 5 syllables

Syllables as you should know are the parts of a word:

this word: "blue" has 1 syllable
this word: "forbidden" has 3 syllable (for-bid-den)

Traditional Haiku usually focuses on themes of nature and natural things

Haiku making is very difficult and requires discipline but it is good training for poetry

Let's see how you guys do.

21 August 2009, 09:02 PM   #2
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The dove flys away
No olive branch in his beak
Peace has yet to come.

21 August 2009, 09:06 PM   #3
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Kupika entranced
moths synged by fiery flame
come let's join the dance

(note got away with a contraction there and i made mine rhyming...traditionally all lines
should be unrhymed)

21 August 2009, 09:15 PM   #4
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by the way Gabby yours is amazing, lovely concrete theme

just want to comment more here: that due to their form Haiku tends to be ethereal and have
a bit of a mysterious nature to it, but some can be TOO zen-like and leave you going "huh?
am i supposed to get that?"

so i appreciate it more when i can understand the theme or what the poet is going for
rather than it being like seemngly like three random lines..

so try to find that balance between mystery and nonsense while trying to convey your


21 August 2009, 09:27 PM   #5
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Hakiu Is Confusing
Because You Can Only Use
A Few Syllables.

21 August 2009, 09:30 PM   #6
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Last edited by Oroborus21, 21 August 2009
funny but i count 6 syllables in: "Haiku is confusing"  (hai-ku is con-fu-sing)  maybe
instead should be 

"Haiku confuses"

22 August 2009, 11:47 AM   #7
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With glossy black wings
The raven slides through the night
In a search for love

hmm...... better than it sounded in my head to me O.o

22 August 2009, 12:53 PM   #8
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All bird will fly south
until the summer is near
for winter's too cold

22 August 2009, 04:00 PM   #9
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sweet solitude calls
in the deep dark forest
for midnight is near

22 August 2009, 04:29 PM   #10
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They will creep and crawl
no telling where they are now
discusting insects

22 August 2009, 04:56 PM   #11
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very good everyone keep it up

22 August 2009, 06:43 PM   #12
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This is a Haiku
It is about birds and peace
maybe something else

22 August 2009, 06:52 PM   #13
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Those two were by me
~Psy~ Lyssas friend

23 August 2009, 11:31 PM   #14
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Finally new post
I've been waiting for a while
Sounds kind of crappy

::sorry my Haiku sounds really like what I describe
I'll try better next time


25 August 2009, 01:00 AM    #15
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Last edited by lunasan, 25 August 2009
In the great balance
I may never be inbetween
I AM Tasakaal


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