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18 July 2009, 12:08 AM   #1
Joined: 17 Jul 2009
Posts: 14
Oh god, I can't put my finger on whats wrong with it. D:
I think I draw to much. I need professional help. xDD

Please tell me whats wrong. DDD:

18 July 2009, 12:25 AM   #2
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OH I love this.
I love the colors that you used and your background really makes the girl stand out.
I think the only thing wrong with it is that the hairs dodge looks kind of cartoonish. You
should've used gray to make the hair shine.
Also, the arm thats going behind her body is kind of awkward. But thats it.
I really like this.


18 July 2009, 12:27 AM   #3
Joined: 17 Jul 2009
Posts: 14
I knew something was wrong! :D
Thank you so much!

18 July 2009, 12:30 AM   #4
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No prob. Glad I could help. :'D

18 July 2009, 04:23 AM   #5
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Joined: 10 Jul 2009
Posts: 124
Ah... I think... the hips should be more defined. That or the torso is a bit short...
actually I think it's the hip. Also the hand as well... xD 

Uhm... since it's her left hand, the thumb should be facing outwards rather than...what
looks like a pinky. o.o And I also think that the fingers tended to slant outwards... if
you held your hand up like hers, and tried to see the same perspective, the only thing you
would see is the thumb, the full index finger, some of the palm and other fingers. (unless
it was drawn at a completely different angel...)


...yeah, I don't make sense this late at night... sorry. xD

18 July 2009, 05:06 AM   #6
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Well this is pretty good!
I like her outfit and her hairstyle's really cute :3

But anyways, what I feel is really like the problem is that the upper portion of her 
body is facing to the right, while the lower protion is facing to the left.
And personally, I think that would be very uncomfortable :s
Also as kyun_yo said, her torso is a bit too short and her dress
starts up way too high. It's going up way past her armpits
and her boobs need to be lowered. 
Really all you need to do is kind of strech out her torso a bit :}
Actually I think I'm about to make you a redline to help a little bit more!~

18 July 2009, 05:14 AM   #7
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Joined: 10 Jul 2009
Posts: 124
Actually Karolina, I don't think the way her face is facing doesn't prove as a problem.
xD It does look possible that it is anatomically incorrect, (but I've drawn that way many
times as well it's possible to face one way and have the body face another.) Her face
isn't angled that far... to the side, so it doesn't seem to be stressed for the neck at
all. (unless it's straining to look that far then yeah.)

You're right about the armpit thing... I didn't notice it. xD

18 July 2009, 05:23 AM   #8
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Last edited by karolinacake, 18 July 2009
Hmm, actually now that I look at it more, it does actually look like 
like body is facing one way, but the arm and head really mess me up.
And actually I think the neck would be kind of stressed, dashfsd
now I'm confused.
Okay, I need to test this out.

Alrighty dude, here's the redline.
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You're really on the right track, but you just need to work on like proportioning a 
bit more! While I was making this I also noticed that the head was a bit large
and the right eye was really off to the side, also the ear was really high up,
but you can easily fix that.
There's nothing wrong with face because that just seems to be your style, and
I like it :3
Also with the hand, I really didn't know what was going on with it.
I know a lot of people have problems with hands (so do I D: ) but just
looking at your own really should help, so next time you're not really sure
which way the hand should be facing just lift your own up real quick
or look in a mirror or find a reference on the internet if you don't want to do 
that :B

Also a last suggestion would be to space your characters out better~
I would really like to see her shoes more, since you came up
with a really cute design for them~ <3

18 July 2009, 08:58 AM   #9
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Last edited by ‹Syndromic_Wonderland›, 18 July 2009
Her hand is a bit weird. There should be a thumb in there. Her left eye is also out of
I agree with what is commented on here and I don't think I need to point out the mistakes.
(Since they've already been pointed out)

I love the shading you did on this, and the dress is really cute. Her eyes are also very
lovely and the feet are well drawn. I'm really terrible at drawing feet so I am impressed
with that. Her hair is also really nice and the color scheme is very good.

The redline thingy karolinacake did was cool, and I think it should help you a lot.

Great job on this! It's well-drawn and better than what I could do. -fails at anatomy-

18 July 2009, 09:05 AM   #10
Joined: 17 Jul 2009
Posts: 14
I love you karolinecake, and Kyun_yo! 
Honestly, intense crtique is kind of fun to read for me! :D

Syndromic, I was struggling with the feet for like 20 minutes or so. I made her right foot
look like a tentacle. o.o
But that you so much for the compleiment! :D

18 July 2009, 03:53 PM   #11
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ilu too! :D
Oh okay good! I was worried I might have been a bit harsh :I

18 July 2009, 06:59 PM    #12
Joined: 17 Jul 2009
Posts: 14
karolinacake, I love your crit! :D
When I really need help there's no such thing as harsh critisizm. xD

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