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Prologue for "Ruby Sacrosanct" Project


15 May 2007, 06:37 AM   #1
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Last edited by KatoChan, 16 May 2007
It's not really a book I'm writing so much as it is a script for a comic.  It's a little
corney, but I like it enough... What do you guys think?  Too much?


------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- When I was a boy, I was severed from my youth... They call me Martyr, I am not such... An extraordinary set of events turned me, high general of the Lyren Red Army, Traitor. I sat in my prime at the young age of 16. "Prodigy." They'd call. "Hero." They'd cheer. (Smirks) Fools. Even as an adolescent I was strong willed. Pure hearted, yes; but ambitious... So much so that the discovering of a secret would, in fact, tear me from my innocence, and turn me; boy prodigy, (Ha ha) HERO... into the tyrant of the shadows... Make no mistake. I do not wish for this story to be convoluted by a message. Consider this the product of my ambition. (What I have to show for it all...) Was the ending worth the story...? But the question still remains, How do I speak? How does a Martyr tell of his daunting tale? I am not dead as they would lead you to believe, however I am not living in the same sense as you are... My story is a unique epic only rightly told by the stars... My name was Hex. I was a hero... And this is a piece of my star stricken testament... CHAPTER ONE Life After Death -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- --------------------------------------------------------------------------------
It's short, I know... But it's a start, right? (Edited: fixed a few things thanks to Lady Da's suggestions ^_^)

15 May 2007, 09:37 PM   #2
Joined: 4 May 2007
Posts: 20
...it's not "abitious" it's "aMbitious"
and the name should be capitalized
(I also don't like the name...seriously, How the hell do you pronounce that?)

...reminds me a lot of H.P. Lovecraft's work- which is great
seriously! Da wants more!
See Da. 
See Da write. 
Write Da, write!

See Da write smut.
Da writes Yaoi smut.
Da's kinda pervy.

Da's FictionPress Account:
http://www.fictionpress.com/u/566220/

16 May 2007, 12:26 AM   #3
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Thanks a lot! ^_^

To be compared to H.P. is truly an honor. o-o

16 May 2007, 12:37 AM   #4
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I like the idea, very cool!

Martyr, oh nice use of vocabulary! I hope you post more, I'm sitting at the edge of my
seat!

*cheers*

Two thumbs up for an awesome prologue!

16 May 2007, 01:09 AM   #5
Joined: 4 May 2007
Posts: 20
it's just reminicint of his whole "Decent into madness" motif...
Besides...Cthulhu is my bishie
See Da. 
See Da write. 
Write Da, write!

See Da write smut.
Da writes Yaoi smut.
Da's kinda pervy.

Da's FictionPress Account:
http://www.fictionpress.com/u/566220/

16 May 2007, 12:43 PM   #6
Joined: 30 Apr 2007
Posts: 11
I once dined with Cthulu. You were there, weren't you Kato? Anyway, did you ever find the
folder this was in? It isn't anywhere in the house.

16 May 2007, 01:32 PM   #7
Joined: 11 May 2007
Posts: 10
BuddhaKyle: So what does he/she/it _really_ look like? I'm curious.

Oh, and good stuff KatoChan. I don't like the genre so much, so I probably won't follow
it... but you write well, and your words were colourful (which is a complement).

16 May 2007, 01:51 PM   #8
Joined: 30 Apr 2007
Posts: 11
who, Kato? *looks at him sleeping... hairy? lol

sorry Kato, deal with it.

16 May 2007, 01:59 PM   #9
Joined: 11 May 2007
Posts: 10
Nooo, Cthulu.

16 May 2007, 06:38 PM   #10
Joined: 4 May 2007
Posts: 20
Like this: 

but not as cute...
See Da. 
See Da write. 
Write Da, write!

See Da write smut.
Da writes Yaoi smut.
Da's kinda pervy.

Da's FictionPress Account:
http://www.fictionpress.com/u/566220/

16 May 2007, 10:26 PM   #11
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Neoeno: What exactly IS the genre?

16 May 2007, 11:15 PM   #12
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Posts: 10
KatoChan: Actually, I don't know. But it seems like a genre that doesn't appeal to me.
Kinda war/fantasy/whichever.

Do not expect simple answers from me! *cowers*

17 May 2007, 01:49 AM   #13
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Last edited by KatoChan, 17 May 2007
Don't worry, I'm not attacking you. ^_^

It was just funny because I didn't think I hadn't let way to the genre yet.

17 May 2007, 02:49 AM   #14
Joined: 4 May 2007
Posts: 20
i'm getting supernatural/political drama
kind of like a good FF game (woah creative comparison there ivy...Yeah...Da has an
obsession)
but with a slight horror element
See Da. 
See Da write. 
Write Da, write!

See Da write smut.
Da writes Yaoi smut.
Da's kinda pervy.

Da's FictionPress Account:
http://www.fictionpress.com/u/566220/

17 May 2007, 02:53 AM    #15
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Sorry... I didn't have time earlier.

I think it's off to a great start.
Make sure to inform us once you've really started!
:D


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