ANOTHER NEW STORY REALLY im not even done with the first one im wiring oh wellS :P
the name it The Devil one
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ANOTHER NEW STORY REALLY im not even done with the first one im wiring oh wellS :P
the name it The Devil one


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17 April 2010, 03:35 AM   #1
Joined: 20 Jul 2009
Posts: 38
intro......
My name is chole and I am a tall skinny pasty pasty asin girl thats 14 and has my lip
pierced. I dont ware shorts ever because of all my cuts. Today im waring some skinny Jeans
with a random pritty shirt.
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Chapter one the meet

It was a a sunny day after school when chole was just sitting agenst the wall after
school. She really didnt want to go home to her foster parints fiting like always. she
then layed down resting her head n her arm. "Hey kid what are you doing here still?" i
look up to see a kid about my age. he was tall and skinny varry pale too. Nothing compared
to my pasty skin thow. He was waring a band shirt and skinny jeans."I hate my life and
dont want to go home." I said thow words to some person i dont evan know thats nice. "oh
im sorry well if u want i chuold have my mom take you home if you want?" he asked "sure"
"ok come on then." He held out his hand to me. I grabed his hand to get up and somthing
just like cliked that made me like him. "Thanks" I said with a blush. "Any time. Names
drew." i smiled "My name is Chole.Nice to meet you i guess" He smiled "You guess" "Haha I
know" we walked to his car and he introdused me to his mom. 'hello" I said with a wisperd
tone. He looked at me with a wierd face. Right when i got home i went up to my room and
ploped on my cold bed. I hade a black blankit and sheets. My room was dark and cold all
the time. I dont really remember what happend to make my room that way but I LOVE it. I
love comeing home to a really nice cold room. It cunferts me i have no idea why i think im
like a devil or something. That whuold be freking amaZing if i was.
Hello my name is carrie and i love to wright storys so i have been trying to wright them on here so yeah i hope u love or at lesset like them

17 April 2010, 07:04 AM   #2
Joined: 20 Jul 2009
Posts: 38
Chapter 2
As i lay upon my cold bed thinking and wishing i was a devil my evil foster dad stomps up
the steeps and gos into his room slaming he door. I jump when he slamd the door but im
used to it all so im all good. I have been living in the foster house for two years and
its almost three by june 14. Yup June 14 2007 is when i came here and now its may 16 2010.
I just wish that my foster parints whuold not argue as much. I think its all because of
me. When I first came to this house they never used to fight and then a month or two went
by and I over herd them fighing for the first time but it was kind of scarry back then
because I didnt know what he whuold do to mamma. (foster mom) I always thought he whuold
hit her or something. My reall mamma and dad used to have thes fights as-well but my dad
beat my mamma. I cryed evry night becaue of that too. One day he choked her up agenst a
wall then slamed her to the floor right in frunt of me. I cryed so hard that night I
thought he was going to kill her that night. But one day they where driving home from
there date night and a big truck semi thing ran right into the car draging them about five
foot ball fealds long and they died instintly. Ever sence then i have cryed myself to
sleep thinking about it and also i hate semis and big trucks. I never liked them any way
thow they always seemd wierd to me. Like something about them buged me and i didnt like it
varry much but i hade to deal with it because I hade to ride a bus to school evrry day. I
riid the bus one day and said f***k it im walking from now on. Thats the end of that
frear. I still am vary scared of semis thow.
Hello my name is carrie and i love to wright storys so i have been trying to wright them on here so yeah i hope u love or at lesset like them

17 April 2010, 08:52 PM   #3
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There are a lot of spelling and capitilization errors in both chapters.

17 April 2010, 09:51 PM   #4
Joined: 20 Jul 2009
Posts: 38
i know that im not stupid i type fast
Hello my name is carrie and i love to wright storys so i have been trying to wright them on here so yeah i hope u love or at lesset like them

17 April 2010, 10:38 PM    #5
Joined: 16 Apr 2010
Posts: 29
Oh, You Can't Concentrate On One Story To? It Seems To Be A Common Problem XD It's Pretty
Good, But With More Detail And Fixing Spelling Airs It Could Be Even Better =) Good Luck!
*~M~*

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Don't Kill Alice (Alice Zacharra Series)
Green Leaf
Last Summer's Black Heart~
'Courtship Of The King's Daughters'
Adam & The Gone
Clock Strikes
Black Hole 
Deserted
Van Hellsin (Dimitri, Demon + Lianna Series)
Downhill Or Uphill From Here
Solitude
Hating On You
If I Go
Strangled Silence
Burning Sun
One Summer
Strike
Unrevealed
Black Hope
How Far Would You Go To Find Out? (Gender Bender)
Marked
Stone-Away



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