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25 March 2010, 03:06 AM   #1
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When was the last time you said you loved me?
When was the last time you actually meant it?
All the things you said to me,
That made my heart skip a beat.
Now don't mean anythign to me.
Because when you said those lies,
As you stared into my hopeful eyes
You were thinking of her.

When was the last time that you thought of me?
When was the last time you could see me?
When was the last time that you told the truth?
When was the last time.
When was the last time.

When was the last time you thought of me while we were talking?
When was the last time you told me the truth?
When was the last time you cried over me.
But Baby you will see
The Real me.
And you will feel what I'm feeling now.
Heart broken,hopeless,completely wrecked.And you will ask yourself.

When was the last time I showed her I loved her?
When was the last time I even tried.
When was the last time that I felt whole.
When was the last time.
When was the last time.
Mhmmmmmmmmmm.

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I know.Many typos.Probably I'm guessing.Yeah.It's written for someone.

~Thankyou
~~Rifor

25 March 2010, 03:08 AM   #2
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Interesting I loved how you managed to get some serious emotion into this!:D

25 March 2010, 03:10 AM   #3
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Thank you.Any crits to give?*obsesses over making my writing perfect*

25 March 2010, 03:14 AM   #4
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Well I notice nothing really other than the typos.

25 March 2010, 03:15 AM   #5
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Thanks.Oh and forgot to mention that the reason some of the questons have periods is
becuase the person already knew the answer to them.As in,"When was the last time you cried
over me."is because she knew the answer was never.

25 March 2010, 03:18 AM   #6
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I see.Again the poem was very meaningful I could, actually decifor some sort of meaning
from it.

25 March 2010, 03:19 AM   #7
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What do you think the meaning was?And do you have any idea who this was about?I'll give
you a hint.There one of us if you know what I mean.

25 March 2010, 03:23 AM   #8
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It is hard to express I have an idea but some how I just can't put it into words, basicly
I think the meaning had something to do with Psy.If it didn't than I think I do understand
the meaning but not who this poem is about.

25 March 2010, 03:25 AM   #9
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Mhmmm.Your almost to the tip of the ice berg on that.Yes it includes Psy.But thw whole
poem isn't about her.She isn't the one I kept asking "When was the last time?"no.That was
someone else.But yes.You have the concept.And you are actually pretty close to the
someone.

25 March 2010, 03:28 AM   #10
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Hmm, interesting I don't have a clue who the second person is but I will let you know if
I get an idea.=b

25 March 2010, 03:31 AM   #11
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Heh.I kind of just took the idea of how I felt and formed it to wear it seemed like a
girl wasn't being treated good by her boyfriend and he was cheating on her when truly it's
way different."Tangerine"is your hint.I'll tell you in messages if you'd like.

25 March 2010, 03:32 AM   #12
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Nah, I wanna try and figure this whole thing out on my own I like trying to figure stuff
out.=b

25 March 2010, 03:33 AM   #13
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Heh."Tangerine."check the knowing and look around for the word.

25 March 2010, 03:35 AM   #14
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Okay.I have a question it is irrelevant but mind reading my story ''Four Angst Ridden
Teens''?

25 March 2010, 03:36 AM    #15
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I'mactually reading it now.:D

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