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7 September 2008, 10:25 PM   #1
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I've been writing a story in my journal and I wanted to know if it's any good so far.
Plus I need some idea's for it. There are two different characters telling the story. I'll
put a smiley before every time I've started.      is Maria and    will be William.

  :   The sky was filled of many colors as the sun set behind the mountains.  The lake
shimmered like a freshly cut emerald with the last of the sun. Different carriages from
all over were coming up to the castle to enjoy the ball. I didn't get to enjoy it though.
For I am just a simple kitchen girl, working hard to feed the royal family. Tonight I also
had to try to feed millions of giggling girls who wanted to marry the prince.  Sadly I
wish I was one of them.  Prince charming is just so dreamy but his personality's just
awful. He wouldn't be able to get out of bed if his personal assistance didn't tell him
which foot to put on the floor first. I know that's a terrible thing to say about the boy
I say I like... Though I don't think I could help it. He's just so dumb. On this thought
it hit me. Not just a fact of some sort. A plate, a porcelain place.

  :   I wasn't exactly sure what had happened. While I was heading back to the castle I
saw a girl. SHe seemed to have fallen from the sky. She fell into the lake but didn't come
back up. This was when I knew something was wrong.Without a second thought I jumped into
the lake after her. When I got her out of the lake I noticed two things about the girl.
The first was the fact that she had shards of porcelain embedded into her head. The second
was a small key that hung on a chain around her neck. I took her back to my room and asked
some maids and a nurse to clean her up. I grabbed some clothes for myself and left the

   :   Father seemed a little angry at me. I really didn't understand why. He should
know why I saved the girl. It was in one of my lessons. ' Always help a girl in
distress' The girl seemed to be in distress. I was a little mad at my father myself.
He had been like that ever since I was born. Him and mom never planned on having another
son. He looked at me then turned and walked away. Right at the door he looked back at me "
Hurry up and get downstairs. Your brother can't put on a ball by himself." He said cooly
then walked out and closed the door. I sighed and headed back to my room to see if the
girl was alright.

   :  I didn't know where I was or how I got there. My head waspounding really hard. I
couldn't remember a thing that happened. Quickly I checked around my neck to see if 'it'
was still there. I let out a sigh of relief when I felt the cold chain around my neck. I'm
not really sure what had happened next but I think I blacked out again.

   :  I took a peek into my room. The girl was still asleep. She looked so peaceful but
also very tired. T sighed to myself. The maids had been talking about a missing kitchen
girl and I thick I found her.She looked like she wouldn't be waking up soon so I headed
downstairs to help out Charming with the girls.

   : I woke up around midnight and looked out the window. The most beautiful girl I'd
ever seen rushing down the steps.  I then saw why. Her dress was turning into rags and her
hair was becoming all tangled. One of her shhoes fell off and she kept running. It was
then when I noticed who the girl was.  It was Ella Brown. A common girl in the village.SHe
was three years older then me but we still talked and stuff. I also saw Charming running
after her but it was too late. Ella was already gone. I thought about helping Ella out a
bit.  " She lives in the village." I called out. The prince didn't seem to notice I was
there.I shook my head and sighed. I gave him more help. " Take the shoe in front of you
and try it on every girl in the Kingdom no matter how unsightly she may look."

   :  I wasn't  sure that Charming even understood me. I didn't care though, He was
still as hot as ever. He did pick up the shoe and go inside but I didn't know if he would
do as I had said. If he did then I'd be happy for Ella. With that I sat back down on the
bed. I finally got to look around the room.The bed was larger then any I'd ever seen, but
the room itself made the bed look small. Tapestries hung on one wall, a sword and shield
on another. The fire place was burning brightly. It was then I became pale. Not because I
was sick but because I figured out where I was. Prince Williams bedroom!

   :  I peeked into my room again. The girl was awake this time. Silently I closed the
door and knocked. " C-c-come in." Her sweet voice echoed into the hall. I was amazed at it
almost. Most of the maids have normal sounding voices, then again most of the maids didn't
have something as valuable as a gold key around their necks. I don't just mean gold in
color either. I mean a solid gold key was hanging around the girls neck. Though I still
didn't believe this girl was a maid. Her voice was angelic. I even thought I heard her in
my head saying it over and over again." C-come in" I then realised that it wasn't just in
my mind. She was saying I could come in.Slowly I opened the door. The girl was beautiful.
Her pale skin made her sapphire eyes appear larger. Her light blond hair curled as it was
still drying. She was looking at me just as I was looking at her. Her cheeks were glowing
red. I then realized that I was  staring at her. I turned a little red myself.

what do you think so far? please I need stuff to add.

5 October 2008, 02:24 AM   #2
Joined: 15 Jun 2008
Posts: 231
omg thats so awesome!

5 October 2008, 11:41 PM   #3
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Yah it is :DDDDDDD

6 October 2008, 02:42 AM   #4
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You guys really think so?

9 October 2008, 04:28 AM   #5
Joined: 15 Jun 2008
Posts: 231
i love the fricken story!!!!!

9 October 2008, 09:23 PM   #6
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I might not write it for a while. We are reading this month instead of writing.

9 October 2008, 10:06 PM   #7
Joined: 15 Jun 2008
Posts: 231
keep writing in your spare time!

9 October 2008, 10:09 PM   #8
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I try to, but ive been really busy lately! :[

9 October 2008, 10:16 PM   #9
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I can't write either. I am reading a collage hanbook on writing.

Very Good entry :D.

9 October 2008, 10:37 PM   #10
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Thank you very much. I'll try to write in my spare time. Though I have a lot of  books
that need reading and I'm writing that Halyn story as well.

9 October 2008, 11:08 PM   #11
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I want to post some of my work, but Ashlee won't let me post topics, sorry.

9 October 2008, 11:47 PM   #12
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What do you mean by that? Just make a diary entry.

10 October 2008, 12:57 AM   #13
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No I want to post in it the club I meant.

Ashley fixed it though, because she rocks. :D

10 October 2008, 01:14 AM   #14
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Oh. Alright then.

10 October 2008, 01:16 AM    #15
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I think she's mad at me though...

Ash, if you don't want me in this club just tell me and I'll leave instead of you kicking
me out because I was kind of a meanie. :[

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