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This diary entry is written by ‹pıɐSʎןdɯıS›. ( View all entries )
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A Poem For My ToughtsCategory: (general)
Wednesday, 14 January 2009
10:06:38 PM (GMT)
A poem for my thoughts, because i feel im going insane... my families simple
ignorance, is getting to my brain
          No matter how you put it, there is nothing you can say... nothing that can
fill the void that i feel today
               simply put my image isnt there... i dont remember the look...i think
its called depression acorrding to the books.?
 Although i dont feel depressed as more confused? wondering how i look from other
point of veiws.
   Living in a judgemental world. Where looks are your first impression. Where going
by what others think is always our obsession,
     How gossip said but not received is how you'd live your life with ease. and when
your simple rules arent followed , the world has end
and havoc follows...
Last edited: 15 January 2009

‹~[RAWRALICIOUS>=3]~› says:   14 January 2009   279565  
That's amazing. I understand how that feels like...........
aussieDUDE says:   14 January 2009   149629  
this isn't 
bad at all! i like it,
Just the right
amount of deepness!
‹X_Chrysanthemum_X› says:   14 January 2009   289342  
I really like your poem, it's very creative and opposing but in a
good way.
‹iiBeINSANEE™› says:   14 January 2009   363382  
Aww, I liike itt! [: What's been going onn? Wanna talkk?
‹{{♥Gelikerz♥}}› says:   14 January 2009   291715  
Aww. I likkke it. :DD
‹<< In love with the damned >>› says:   15 January 2009   617316  
thats really good
Oroborus21 says:   15 January 2009   796375  
its not particularly elegant but it conveys a lot of sentiment and
what you are feeling. this line seems clumsy and out of place:

How gossip said but not received is how you'd live your life with

but your finishing is strong

keep working at them..some good stuff to build on
‹pıɐSʎןdɯıS› says:   15 January 2009   641315  
well ive never wrote poetry realy ever except like once for english
class im only 14 lol im not exactly a poet i was bored and wrote how i
felt and "how gossip said and not received " is saying you love to
spread it but when directed towards you you hate the worl wich ties it
too the last line...
Oroborus21 says:   15 January 2009   466571  
i think you could drop that line and it would be better. but keep
writing, its all about getting out whats inside of you....thats what
its about and its great to do it.
‹pıɐSʎןdɯıS› says:   15 January 2009   285217  
but saying how u love to spread gossip but not redeive it then when
people talk about you and break this rule havoc follows so why drop it
‹[[§ylviĄ]]› says:   16 January 2009   644615  
Very good.
If that all came from you yourself and just ur heart i think it is
exactly how everything is.
Good job :]
remix says:   1 February 2009   414539  
cool lol XD XD XD XD XD very emotional and thoughtful to yo self
‹pıɐSʎןdɯıS› says:   1 February 2009   627285  
its not only myself
‹Abigail May› says :   25 April 2009   128669  
this is awesome


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