my book i want to make Login to Kupika  or  Create a new account 

This diary entry is written by ‹wolfkid_hates_war›. ( View all entries )
Previous entry: Diary 10 January 2009 in category (general)

my book i want to makeCategory: (general)
Wednesday, 4 February 2009
09:07:01 PM (GMT)
heres the beggining tell me if i should finish it 

I awoke in a daze to screaming and crashing. I layed on my bunk when they attacked I
was sleeping. 
The port I was in was called pearl harbor. Metal flew as the ships were bombed people
screaming and trying to get to the top as it was sinking i got up then stumbled.
Luetinent Vickers came and pulled me up we ran out of the room to get to the top he
was to late to get out i got out before him but by the time i was out the ceiling
crashed on top of him. He was dead. As i ran along as the pipes burst and there were
fires in the kitchens. The ship was falling apart. I was running to try to find a way
out I knew I was trapped. 

tell me wat u think.

‹XxXImHis_Pretty_RaveGirlXxX› says:   4 February 2009   677867  
really good word choice! Congrats.

Sk8terGirlxx says:   4 February 2009   531523  
Wow, thats really good! i can picture it in my head, you have a
talent for writing I see.
coffie1221 says:   4 February 2009   657127  
wow thats amazing!!!! 

you should finish it 
‹wolfkid_hates_war› says:   4 February 2009   247476  
k i will finish it
‹Up-in-the-Clouds› says:   4 February 2009   114691  
i agree with everyone. i can totally picture that in my head, and
that's a good thing bc not many stories i read can do that. you're and
AMAZING writer, and you picked a good story to write about. can't wait
for more!
‹wolfkid_hates_war› says:   4 February 2009   537735  
see my chater its better
ella2hip49 says:   5 February 2009   434248  
it was really good i think you should finish it but heres a tip you
should add some stuff before it too that would make it even better  
also  how do you post stuff for evrey on to see??? : - )
‹Funn_size› says:   5 February 2009   818295  
awesome dude lolz XD
‹WE'RE GOING IN THE VAGINAAAA› says :   5 February 2009   847481  
It's quite good, could use some better puntuation though, thataways
it doesn't seem to choppy..just a suggestion


Next entry: Chapter 1 in category (general)
Related Entries
‹SunLitMoon.›: dead poem
Katilix: I'm Dead
‹~Sam~Alaki~=ForeverLove~›: Dead..
love_swimming_girl: Dead As I Am ....
Wolf_Demon_24: Poem-Love is Dead

About Kupika    Contact    FAQs    Terms of Service    Privacy Policy    Online Safety
Copyright © 2005-2012