it sounds more like a song!

u should sing it, or give it to some1 to sing!!!

i think it would be an awesome song for someday listen to it on the
radio!!

~Love,
Madison~

thanks ^^ i dont really like to sing...but i could find someone i
guess

it was pretty well written.
i dont like the line: "please dont drop me like a habit"

i dont think it makes sense, as habits are something typically hard to
change and the rest of the poem indicates that he left you rather
easily or is trying to

and the last line...isnt strong enough and doesnt conclude the poem
very welland to make it worse, it doesnt seem to make sense...
the poem is a lot stronger if you leave off this lien and end it with
the line just before it....

what happened to Mike? he seems like a nice guy that likes you but
doesnt have a chance...poor mike.

thanks, thats really good feedback. and mike is my best-guy-friend.
and this poem is mainly about how my BF had just worked on his
skateboard for like 2 hours and was dyin to go try it out...but i
caught him(called) on his way out the door and i was upset and he
hates to hear me upset cuz it hurts him. so i was beggin him to stay
on the phone and he knows tht mike is good with problems, so he said
to call mike...and i got mad...cuz i needed him to  just be there.
just then mike calls on the house phone...so i told my BF tht he won
id talk to mike if he wanted to leave me. and THEN he decides to stay
on the phone with me, so i was like "no, go fucking have fun with ur
skateboard. i'll go talk to mike JUST LIKE YOU WANTED." and thts the
ONLY time i have ever been angry toward my BF (keven) cuz i love him
to death. and i know he loves me back...so all and all i talked to
mike and wrote the poem and mike was upset over something too so we
just stayed on the phone while we both wrote. But karma came back
around and got keven, lol. tht night he IMs me sayin he's goin to the
ER cuz he fell off his skateboard...come to find out he broke his
elbow **ouch**