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Monday, 3 March 2014
06:00:08 AM (GMT)
I'm sick of all my comments on this site saying my last diary entry was "I am
leaving in 3 days," and sick of this essay. So, I decided to post some of my poetry.
I haven't written it in a long time, but I got back into the habit of scribbling it
down when I have the time. 
My poetry is by no means "good." I think it is quite awful actually, but this site is
a nice place to release it anonymously in hopes that I can get some good ol'
constructive criticism and improve! (:

"Name Pending"

Meet me where the rain shines,
Meet me where the sun falls,
Meet me where gravity lies,
And people go tumbling down.

Where there are no fines,
Where we are not thralls,
Where I unbind from these Earthly ties,
And imagination is my crown.

Avast! Stop your whines.
Geronimo! Hear my calls.
Tally forth! Need not say our good byes.
And we can never be pushed down.

"I Chose To Stay"

I sit atop a hill,
All around me is a beautiful view.
This hill is my prison.
I wish to leave, but I chose to stay.

I chose this hill,
Knowing the limitations it imbued.
This is the place I'll send my son
For I never left, I chose to stay.

I am static on this hill,
Fearing I may never move.
The wheel keeps turning on.
I am here to stay.

Damn this hill!
Damn this verse!
Damn it all which I rehearse!
Freedom is what I need.
No longer caring to heed
All the pleas to stay.
I will go, and make my own way.
I do not need a hill when valleys are so deep.

Please be gentle. ;-; No one has ever read my poetry except for romantic reasons, and
these are not romantic.

‹jesus_of_suburbia› says:   3 March 2014   164568  
idk much about poetry at all but these are really good!
‹Wonderlust King› says:   3 March 2014   609874  
You think so? 
‹Kairos› says:   3 March 2014   228273  
Well the first was actually quite tasteful 
Though the ending was kinda sudden 

The second I'm not really find of
It's a good read
But I don't really get the significance 
Your ideas are all jumbled
‹Wonderlust King› says:   3 March 2014   287729  
Yeah I wrote the first one in about thirty minutes, and the second one
is a lot more personal.

I have a serious problem. My mind is all over the place.

Thanks though. (: 
‹Kairos› says:   3 March 2014   123299  
I mean I got the personal gain and difficulties of it
But it didn't really make sense
You know?
Like in the beginning your tone was very mellow
Kinda until the prison part
I think that's where I got confused
It was such a quick transition
Try describing a scenario more
So that when you do change the tone
The audience will get a better dramatic field for it 
‹stickyvaporeon› says:   3 March 2015   776777  
I hate the first one 
I love the second one
‹Wonderlust King› says :   3 March 2015   847691  
Thanks. I really hate the first one too. 


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