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Sunday, 16 January 2011
02:09:07 PM (GMT)
Not "In sight" like a mountain is in sight either, like you can see it but the
closer you get the farther it seems and then it's like BAM mudslide does eight
thousand dollars worth of property damage to your and surrounding houses.


I won NaNoWriMo by getting 50,000 words in thirty days, but since have been trying to
actually finish the book (at a much saner pace, may I add.)

At chapter fourteen, I am now actually almost done. I've got maybe... Six chapters

It's not that I haven't meticulously planned it out, it's just that I plan the events
of the book, then end chapters where the break seems most natural.

Now it is time to list revisions I know I'll need though.

1- More emphasis placed on Vessal's concept of lying to get people nearer to the

2- Draw attention to the possibility of exploration

3- Mention the lack of horses in other areas

4- Ejin shouldn't be revealed as an antagonist until after the king falls ill

5- Further develope the romantic interest of Pate/ Adelaide and (by extention) make
it more sad when she leaves

6- Make it clearer to the reader that Vessal has no interest in Mimii

7- Make Vessal's father's death less confusing/ more clear that it's foreshadowing of
the kings illness

8- Larger role played by Leander

9- Use bets as a tool to show the relationship between Ves and Pate

10- Everything else can be done within the next few chapters.

‹SqueeneyTodd› says:   16 January 2011   492883  
If this is ever published, I predict that people will ship Vessal
with Mimii anyways.
Kirti says:   16 January 2011   537796  
If I've done my job right, they'll ship Vessal and Pate.
If my readers are creativly crazy die hard moe fans, they'll ship Ves
and Gren too.

That'd be fun for me ^_^ 
‹SqueeneyTodd› says:   16 January 2011   350260  
Wait, so is VessalxPate canon? 
Kirti says:   16 January 2011   359474  
Nope! Pate is completly straight, and Vessal is his loyal asexual

But loyalty is as strong a bond as love, so ideally the emotions
should seem easy to mistake for one another. 
‹SqueeneyTodd› says:   16 January 2011   244690  
Ooooh. Okay. It's a platonic thing, then? 
Kirti says:   16 January 2011   835521  
Something like, yeah! A non romantic master/servant relationship.

As a side note, showing romance in first person narration about
someone other then the protaganist without making said protaganist
seem like a stalker eavesdropping creep is hard... 
‹SqueeneyTodd› says :   16 January 2011   642936  
XD Sounds like it. A completely loyal servant who's always by his
master's side. Readers just have to remember that. 


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